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Monday, November 10, 2008

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Blogger Vaardnik said...

I think the original is correct. Lori's aim is to describe the smoke, not its action, so she uses an adjective, not an adverb.

Another example: "When Arkie drank and smoked, he would arrive at work pungent each morning" :-)

Arkie

November 10, 2008 5:37 PM  
Blogger tim said...

I agree that the adjective describes the smoke, but it’s misplaced and used as a malformed adverb. It probably would work with a comma: The smoke rose, pungent [in the otherwise clean morning air] and whispy. Or The smoke, pungent, rose…. Or The pungent smoke rose….

November 10, 2008 5:54 PM  

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